Castle Paradox

[Shadowiii]

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But enough talk, have at you!

[Eggie]

I never realized the posts until later.

[Eggie]

Shawna... I looked up her. I typed in her name, and pressed "search".
... Please, find her...
Yes! She is in cell D-8, on the second floor. Perfect. Now I can go and save her, for the sake of our beautiful relationship. I also took note that the inmate list is very low. I needed to tell her I'm sorry for the way I was acting. I needed to save her before something bad happens, like whatever is being planned.

[Eggie]

I ran down the hall. The door stated "Dungeon". I gotta hurry. I opened-! It's locked! Damnit! I need to open this. I raised my sword to my face, "Please," I said, "Help me now." I cut down the door knob, and it fell off. I fiddled around with the insides of the lock and it unlocked. Hopefully I can save Shawna before anyone notices. I walked right into a guard, he turned and gasped, just before I took him down.
I really needed to be careful. I put him in open cell so he won't be seen easily. Perhaps it would be better for me to just take everyone out and be happy that I have caused some damage to Force. It's not like I'm killing anyone, though some people on Force would be better off dead.
I walked down the hall of cells, they were all empty, except for one. A werefox girl was in it, crying. Oh my God. D-8. It was Shawna. I was too late. I cut open the lock on the door, too sad to realize how much power this blade has stored in it.
"Shawna..." I said in a very sorrowed way. I was holding back tears, because I have failed.
"Mike!" She said in a semi-joyful way, as she jumped from tears, "What happened? Did they morph you, too?"
"No," I sighed, "But I'm like this for a reason, what happened to you? We're you captured?"
"Yes," She bowed her head in depression, "Force are taking civilians and using them as test projects. When they realized I was your girlfriend, they wanted me."
"I'm sorry," I apoligized, "I did this to you, and I was also mean to you before. I am so sorry."
"Don't be." Shawna said in a cheery voice, "There got's to be a way to change us back. I know this one guy that was a werelizard one morning, then a human at night." I hope that works for Shawna, because it probably won't work for me.

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(Note to Everyone: This story is going to get a little Dirrty, so be warned. I.E. Furry Sex And Cursing.)

[Eggie]

We went out of the roof door before anyone found us. I showed Shawna the tree down to the ground, and after running on the side of the forest, we were out of the prison's range. I had a feeling they found out about what happened when the alarm's went off. They were pretty loud, but even so, we were too far away to be tracked.
We ran to Larsington, because that's where my old militant post was. I was part of the Peace Corps for a little. Before I even did anything really helpful for the Peace Corps, I joined Force. Since they had no idea I quit on them, I guess they might help me out. I had no idea what to do really, except keep Shawna safe. We arrived in Larsington.
"Mike?" She asked, "Maybe I should stay at my old house?"
"Yeah," I nodded, "Stay there for the night." She had her own house before she moved in with me at my appartment. That house is still officially her's.
"See you later." I hugged her. She went down one road, and I went down the other.

[Eggie]

I arrived at my old Peace Corps at nighttime. The hangar door was open. In there I saw Biggs (A big tough gun-man), Wedge (Fastest human ever), Ty (Right mysterious) , and Jesse (Some girl that leads the other three around). I hope they didn't realize that I had betrayed them. I walked into the hangar, and as they were resting at the entrance, Biggs got up, seeing me come in, "You there!'
"Hold on," I stopped, "It's me Mike!"
"What the?!" Jesse said, confused, "Ha! You're a damn horse now!"
"Well..." I stood there, hoping that they would understand.
"Where have you been?" Wedge asked in anger, "Ya dirty animal!" Thanks Wedge.
"God," Jesse laughed, "I just rode around your mother yesterday!" She broke up laughing. That one hurt... It really hurt. This is awaying from jokes.
"Guys," I spoke up, "I need your help right now, and-"
"You want some hay?" Ty asked. Stop it. The others let out a couple of snickers.
"I know I'm a horse now," I laughed despite the fact I wanted to kill them, "But-"
"But nothing!" Biggs interrupted, "We don't need you make this place reek of horsesh*t. Get outta here!" He threw a wrench at me. What the hell?! Why would he do that? He hates Monstera more than I used to. The others laughed and said other mean things. I guess that I am and outcast.

[Eggie]

An outcast. God, I am screwed. I needed to find help, but there was none. I was alone. I walked out to the cliffs beside the ocean. Right now Force is planning to do something bad, and I gotta find a way to stop them. All my help is gone. Jesse and them will be punished by me, until they listen. God, I wanted to strangle them, even if that was the way I was. There are two options, not kill them or do. I needed to look deep in my conscious.
Argh! Forget it! I'm so lonely! I'll never be able to stop the war, or help Shawna, or anything. I felt so down. I- I couldn't stand i-it. Oh my God. I'm crying. Puss. God, do you ever use that manly power you have inside you? Tears rolled down my big mouth.
Out of confusion, Mr. T appeared on my right shoulder, "Hey foo'!"
"Hey Mr. T," I sighed, still crying, "What?"
"You can't just go and kill your friends," He said, "Pity the foo' that kill his or her friends."
"But I'm so upset." I said, falling in a bigger depression. Hillary Duff appeared on my left shoulder, dressed in red.
"Look," She snapped, "Go in there, stab them, run out, and flee the county. No one will ever find you."
"Maybe you're right." I nodded. I got up and grabbed my sword, "Time to make a name for myself."
Chester Bennington appeared on my right shoulder, "No! Put that sword down!" I let it go. He continued, "Killing people is one of the biggest bads you can do. Stop it." I shook my head as George Jetson appeared on my left shoulder, "Kill them! Kill them! Kill them! KILL! You'll love the feeling." I was so perplexed.
Mya and J-Lo appeared on my right shoulder. It was starting to get crowded. J-Lo speaked, "Mike, I find you hot for a horse, and that can take you places, so use that and don't kill anyone."
"Mike," Mya rubbed my neck, "You have you're problems, but there is another way out..."
The 17 Wizards of Disney appeared on my left shoulder. They were heavy, "Die! Die! Die! Mickey Mouse goes and kills people, why can't you?" In that instant, they all just disappeared, and she appeared, Evanescence, the girl, they rubbed my neck while "My Immortal" echoed in the background, "Don't worry." She started humming in her mesmerizing voice. I would of fallen asleep if Commander Luise, the leader of the Peace Corps hadn't spoke up, "Mike Rose..." She disappeared, and the song faded out.
"Yes, Commander?" I stood up, realizing that I was still crying a little. I hoped that he wouldn't see it.
"I see that you are interested in stopping Force from enslaving the world." He nodded, "I would be honored to have you back on Peace Corps."
"Yessir," I saluted him, " I would."
"Very well," He shook my claw, "Maybe later you can tell me what happened."

[Me]

Minor problems:
You have conflicting tenses in your writing. What I mean is, at one point, you say "God I am screwed," which is in the present tense. Most of the actions are in the past tense. This is not a good thing in writing, as it just makes teh story become confusing as to when things are happening.
And the singer for Evanescence is named Amy Lee, I believe.
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[Iblis]

[Aethereal]

[Eggie]

(Me- I know that I have my past and present tense all screwed up, but try not to focus on that little thing. I'll try to keep it past now. Thank you for stating Amy Lee's name. )

(Iblis- Thank you for confirming Amy Lee's name. I need that for later.)

(Aetheral- Yeah, I don't really multi-post anymore. I have more functional Internet linkage. And thank you for getting rid of the excess posts. That is right sweet.)

(Everyone- I replaced the sex scene with something more reasonable.)


I went to Shawna's house. She was looking at her photos when we were on vacation in her bedroom, "It was so lovely."
"Yes, we had an amazing time." I agreed. She sighed.
"What's wrong?" I asked her.
"I feel like those good times will never be topped," She said in sorrow, "Like that was the peak of our relationship."
"I don't," I came up to her, "We still have the future."
"But will it get better." She looked into my eyes. I smiled, and leaned over to her. We kissed using our deformed mouths. Then... well... we expressed out love in a more... physical way. And all those movies and shows about it being hot, fast, and multiple partners. Garbage. I like it the way we did it. Slow, cuddling, romantic. It was us together. No damn magazine could ever top that. This was the peak of our relationship.

[Eggie]

The next morning, I got out of bed, put on some clothes, and went to the washroom, I never realized it before, but my Monstera body has amazing muscles. God they were huge! I could lift a frickin' truck! This is right cool. I guess being a Monstera does have it's advantages, but I will always miss my rightful body.
I kissed Shawna, and put on my music, quietly. I took out my CD's. Hybrid Theory, Meteora, Fallen, The Eminem Show. I feel like a slow meaningful song. I put in Evanescence and turned to "My Immortal". The sound of the piano filled my pointy ears, and surfaced on my brain. I began to think.
How could I help Shawna? Was there a cure for what she has become? Maybe there is a drug that does the opposite. Monstera to a human. Could be. It seems possible. I don't know much about Bigene Science, but I think it could work. I mean, they probably have some of that drug, just in case something were to happen.
But this brings up another question. Why are they doing this? I thought the President wanted to enslave all Monstera to a pityful fate. This doesn't make any sense. Not to mention the fact that there gots to be a leader for the President. Someone superior. Maybe he is being controlled. Something is right wrong in the world.
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Right wrong? Man, I say that too much, and I only said it now!

[Eggie]

I listened to the piano ring up in the end and walked out the door. I needed to go see Cid. He was nice, and he would understand. I walked out the door, and walked to the Peace Corps. It was still 6AM, so I didn't have to worry about the 4 idiots pissing me off. I walked up the catwalk and into his office. He was up, as usual.
"Hello, Cid." I greeted.
"Mike!" He smiled, "You're back. I have been so worried."
"Yeah," I laughed, "I have been through lots of sh*t."
"Point is you're back," Cid looked at me, "What happened? Were you tested out with Force?"
"Yes," I lied, "Is there a drug for reversal?"
"Probably." He nodded. Great. This is reassuring.
"Where would you think it would be?" I asked.
"Well, can we discuss this later?" He asked, "Right now we can use your Monstera power to help us out with a HUGE problem."
"What?" I asked, fearing the worst.
"Okay," He breathed, "Right now, the president is a minion. He follows the order of Lunara, a werewolf ex-male."
"Ex-male?" I was surprised, "What the?"
"Yes." He nodded, "It was basically a bad Tek casting."
"Tek?" Hmmm... What is that? "What is it?"
"It's a power hidden in all Monstera." He nodded, "Like magic, except not relatively evil. You know that. Well, anyway, Lunara, I believe is trying to capture Monstera do extract DNA from them and morph humans into Monstera, and using a couple of holy artifacts, she'll drain all of their power, and then she'll have it all. Probably there is something in it for the President, and since he has lots of power, he could use Force to crush the towns, and extract DNA from all the prisoners."
"So," I asked, "We are the only Peace Corps around. You saying that we have to stop her before things get out of hand alone?"
"Well, yes." He shrugged.
"We so need help." I sighed.
"I'll try to find out more," He cheered, "'Til then, you'll have to follow along with me."
"Okay," I said obviously freaked out, "We are going to save the world."
"Yes," He agreed, "We need a new name."
"Alternative Lost Vertical Ranks," I suggested, "stating what we are. The "Other" good force of power."
"Hmm..." Cid shrugged, "Doesn't sound so great. Got a nickname that is not ALVR?"
"Yes," I nodded with a smile, "Allo Vera."

[Eggie]

Act 3: Points of Authority

I was ordered to enter the President's HQ, find some rabbit, get out and bring her to her base. We do this, and we make a team of Monstera our allies. I would have to sneak in someway, so Cid lent me his truck. He said it was okay if I broke it.
It was weird. The size and shape of my body really made it weird to drive. But I drove anyway. The tinted windows Helped me get in, which I did, and I would have to get in the prison, which was guarded well. I needed to make a distraction. So as I drived through the streets of the city, I floored it.
The truck flew throught the streets and crashed into the fence I jumped out into some junk pile. The truck crashed right into the building, and blew up, causing a major hole, that started to crumble. The whole wall could've came down from that. Everyone ran over to examine it. I crawled through the old trucks, scared that one will cut me up. I got out, and entered the front door. There was a lobby, full of citizens. Oh sh*t.
I ran up the stairs being chased by two guards. I turned around and kicked them, forcing them through the air, "Take that, biotch!"
I went in the elevator, and climbed out of it. I jumped up on the top, using my super strength, and jumped over the the ladder shaft. I knew that the dungeon was not accessible without a security card. I just climbed down the ladder, and found the door to the basement. I entered it, and ran down the hall. I found the prison. You see this, is a very small prison, so usually only one or two people are in it.
I went in and found her. It was the wererabbit I found at the temple where I became this. She was wearing her white dress. She recognized me right away. She looked at me in disappointment, "Oh, are you here to free me?"
"Yes." I said as I cut open the bars. This sword... it was unnatural.
"Good." She climbed out, "As long as you're not frickin' trying to kill anyone or feel someone out."
"Well," I stammered, "About that. I'm sorry. I was so different then. It was like I wasn't there. It was like someone became me, physically and mentally. I don't know why, but I am here to help you, so we better hurry." She followed me to the elevator shaft. We climbed to the top of the building. We needed to get out of there.

[Iblis]

Wow, Eggie, what a great way to ignore what we were saying.
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