Castle Paradox

[planethunter]

the story I posted, quite a while back was just like a game demo, I cut out a few bits and left as much of the core story as I could. Just so people could get the jist of it. Anyway, the main hero's objective is more to stop this war altogether. But to do that he will have to learn how to manilpulate the stones, both of Garack and Karack. It's not all conflict though, to access certain parts of the game you will have to work with other characters and to be a master of the stones ( or a true stonekeeper ) you will need to trade with others and even combine certain stones.

I can see where your coming from where your hero has to escape from the planet, but my opionion is this, would the audience be more satisfied in running away/ escaping from this hostile planet or making a stand against the overlord of Cryzekia? Just a thought.
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[LeRoy_Leo]

Point taken. Basically I left the story open for suggestions, so I think I will take yours. Obviously there will be some quarilling with him to get off. The overlord of Cryzekia would stop at nothing to keep the universe together. (That is how he says keep the universe hostage on his planet.) And like I said, there will be some disagreements among the common people of Cryzekia as well. They all come from different cultures, and from different views, and you know what happens when some races dissagree, dont you. Well, they fight. Some; I am sure; would resist by ignoring, and/or trying to make peace, but others will retaliate with violent means.

Again, I see what you mean. Thanks for the advise.
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