Castle Paradox

Eggie · Joined: 12 May 2003 Posts: 904

This is Karitus. As a human and Monstera. You might remeber him from a while back when I was taught how to draw furries.

This is Yvera, a rabbit Monstera. She is in my Mystic Fate story.

This is Eggie and Jayla. I put lyrics on the side of both of them to mix the music art with visual art. Basically, the lyrics are representing what they are feeling. Jayla is in love, and Eggie is sad for a loss that he has suffered.

Setu_Firestorm · Posted: Tue Dec 16, 2003 2:08 pm Post subject:

The only thing I can honestly point out is that the torsos on your drawings tend to be way too long compared to the leg length. Unless it's your style er something.

But anyways, not like I'm an expert in the field...
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Fenrir-Lunaris · **WUT** Joined: 03 Feb 2003 Posts: 1747

The thong on the rabbit in the second picture is WAY too small, even for what it is. It also is too angular, and doesn't cover enough of the crotch (imagine me saying that, knowing what I do). Not to poke fun at it or anything but it looks like the costume design for the 5th Element.

Iblis · Posted: Tue Dec 16, 2003 2:22 pm Post subject:

What is that yellow thing the human Karitus is holding?

Why are Yvera's breasts done darker than the rest of her?

In the last pic, Eggie doesn't look sad or in love. He just looks kind of bored (at least to me).

It's all better than your previous art though.
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The Wobbler · Joined: 06 Feb 2003 Posts: 2221

MultiColoredWizard · Posted: Tue Dec 16, 2003 5:01 pm Post subject:

You really need to learn how clothes fold badly. Observe the people around you, Akira Toriyama obviously did, and his work is beautiful. So yeah, look for his work.

Oh, and make the pants, you know, actually leg length long. I'm totally not digging the OMFG LONG JACKET style. Legs are TWICE as long as the torso.

Oh, and you did really bad on the display of emotion on the third picture. Try doing easier ones like happiness.

Eggie · Joined: 12 May 2003 Posts: 904

Well, Eggie, on the third picture, isn't supposed to look sad. He is supposed to look board. And I am starting to get Anatomily correct, with fattened upper legs and bottom. Also, I am going to go back to my old style of clothe folding, since it looked better and got more compliments. Yvera's breasts are darker, because when I first scanned the picture, they were to light, so I quickly changed it.

And if that wasn't enough, more of my art. Oh my God, scream (Note to Everybody: Not Literally)

Shadowiii · **It's been real.** Joined: 14 Feb 2003 Posts: 2460

The women seem to not enjoy wearing much clothing in this ~~teenage fantasy hormone-induced~~ world. You do know that you can draw a girl sexy/cute fully clothed. Take my Scrapped Princess wallpaper for example... Smokin'

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Iblis · Posted: Tue Dec 16, 2003 11:04 pm Post subject:

Sticking lame song lyrics on your art does not improve it.

Also, does Eggie not know how to properly hold a sword?
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Chaos Nyte · Reviewer Joined: 03 Jan 2003 Posts: 511 Location: Hirakata

I wish MY boobs were that high, and yet so saggy.

Roach Lir · Joined: 08 Jul 2003 Posts: 119 Location: United Kingdom

... I thought you were a guy, Chaos.

Anyway, as for the pic, the guy's torso is too big for his legs.
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Me · Posted: Wed Dec 17, 2003 7:39 pm Post subject:

CN is his avatar!!!!!
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Eggie · Joined: 12 May 2003 Posts: 904

Me- Maybe you should say something more constuctive.
Chaos Nyte- I know you wish you want that. I am getting better at drawing rack.
Roach Lir- I am now a master of torsos. I can draw them with relative ease.
Shadow- She dresses like that because she is a slutty dresser. Hey, it's reality the way people dress.

Shadowiii · **It's been real.** Joined: 14 Feb 2003 Posts: 2460

Uncommon · Posted: Fri Dec 19, 2003 6:21 am Post subject:

Eggie, the proportions are still really bad, and your subjects never have any emotion! Please fix.