Castle Paradox

[zetes]

This is a quick, terrible sketch done by bellwaks and myself. I did everything but the moon man.

http://www11.brinkster.com/yupples/g%F6dsvin%20f%E5nig%20kolgruva/Sun%20and%20the%20Moon%20Man.jpg

I think my guy is okay, but geez. anyway, comment and critique, because I want to become a better artist.

edit: copy+paste the url.

[Royal]

Hey zetes! good to see youre uploading pictures too, ok here's my thoughts since you stated out that you want to improve I'll go hard on ya

First, don't post pictures with this resolution, it's gravely annoying since you can't see the whole picture, the high resolution is good for printing and for details (I always paint in like 3000*3000 but only post in say 700*900) and since this is obviously a very fast sketch the oversized image isn't necessary.
(I put up a more suitable res)

For composition I think it's a good tip to do thumbnails before you actually go into details, this way you know where to put stuff and you don't have to worry about things like focus and perspective, I don't think you did that here. I can't really tell what's going on in the pic, there are two guys but what is the story? the background is really confusing since it lacks depht.
Work from reference alot more and study some general rules for perspective, there are alot of good books out there. Also try to narrow down youre picture focus, there is alot of empty space in this illustration which is quite boring to look at.

Another thing you should practice on is to get rid of "the chicken lines". It seems like youre scrubbing your way through a line instead of making one smooth, this is a common mistake many people do. You have to have confident in what you draw or else the image will lose volume and looks cheesy.
For the guy, there are several mistakes in anatomy that you can easily avoid by dividing up the body in primitives (quick&bad example but you get the general idea)


you should also try to make more interesting poses if this is a picture with action in it, go for a much more dynamic pose.
Hope I made some sense with this, keep on practicing and study some art books it will do you alot good

[zetes]

wow, thanks for the comments.

about the thumbnail, the only reason I did not do that is because I did not know how to, heh.

Also, I am planning to start working through a perspective book this summer. That will help muchly.

whee.

[Fenrir-Lunaris]

My advice to to you Zetes.... Draw. Draw draw draw draw. Draw draw draw draw draw draw draw draw draw. Until it HURTS. Repeat for next 10-15 years of your life.

[Komera]

Why do I bother trying to critique when Royal is obviously going to get there before I do? And it's a good thing Royal bothered to post the smaller image because I'd hate to think this comprises the entirety of your picture.

[Royal]

More art so we don't have to compete about critiques!
Hehe
Good suggestions Komera

[Misteroo]

I've said it many times before. Continuous practice will eventually make you better at what you do.

I can't say anything else that Royal hasn't already said ^_^;;
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[Rpeanut]

What' you people have scanners, .... no wonder you guys are good,
I'm 2 poor to get a scanner, and another paint program.....

But still, MS PAINT ROCKS, VIVA LA MS PAINT!!! :flamedevil:
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[Blazes Battles Inc.]

Actually, MSpaint is one of the most god-awful programs ever. Times 5. Have you even used any other art programs? MSPaint has the most terrible palette management I've ever seen, for starters, you can't have multiple pictures opened on the screen at once, and there's no apparent 'soft edge' that gives the feeling you're actually DRAWING something. It's incredibly hard to use, and you can make something that looks much, much better using another art program in less than half the time it took you in MSPaint.
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[Aethereal]

Reviving dead threads is evil. Hint: Don't do it ^_^
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[Komera]

*agrees reviving dead threads is evil... but this is a nessisary correction*

Correction to my above post about monitor dpi:
Most new monitors display at 96dpi. Older monitors display at 72dpi. The standard for the web is 72dpi, and thus programs that make graphics for the web only (yes, there are some specifically for that) normally only make graphics at 72dpi. However, most people (who bother to resize an image) post graphics at 100dpi... which is just a little above that 96dpi that new monitors can do.
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SD - Ten creatures remaining.

[Rpeanut]

"Dead Threads"???... anyways, i do use another program, idraw, and Ultimate Paint, though it's gonna run out in say 10 more times I use it. but still Mspaint is fine with me still, except it's ^*(^*()^*()^*() palette is so hard to change from 24 to 16
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